Fuzzy Wuzzy had no hair.
Fuzzy Wuzzy wasn't fuzzy,
This poem reminded of one of my rejection letters, probably because I repeat the silly saying a million times a day to my baby (Hey, they say it's good for an infant's brain development to hear lots of rhyming verses. I have to say it's not so good for Mom's sanity however. But anyway...)
One editor told me I needed to develop my showing-and-not-telling abilities a little better. She went on to explain that she'd highlighted text in my story where I was telling instead of showing. I was stunned she'd went to so much work for my little ol' story and I was really excited about revising her highlighted spots.
Except...when I opened the document, only the words WAS, WERE, HAVE, and HAD were highlighted.
Interesting teaching technique, huh? I thought so. It certainly opened my eyes to how much I actually do tell instead of show.
Though ninety percent of WAS/WERE in a story could most certainly be crumpled and thrown in a trash can, I think there are still a few instances where WAS is the best word choice.
Like in the first few lines of J. K. Rowling's Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone :
"Mr. and Mrs. Dursley, of number four, Privet Drive, were proud to say that they were perfectly normal, thank you very much."
Other times, it can be fairly easy to fix a was/were and have/had problem like in the sentences:
He was a dog once. Now he was human.
Which can easily turn to...
Once a dog, Rover now roamed with the human crowd.
And...that's all I have to say about that. Be on a lookout for those sneaky telling words.